決勝“人堆城堡”

李全忠

作者和他的家人、朋友一起參加他們所在城市舉辦的“人堆城堡”比賽，他們會(huì)成功嗎？一起到文章中看看吧！

1 “Jordi！ Wake up！” Dads voice calls from the hallway， and I sit up quickly. Today is the day！ The day that I will finally be a casteller—a castle builder.

2 My city is hosting todays competition. Never before have I been part of the tower. It was so high. And it sometimes fell. I was hesitant to be up there. Today， for the first time in a competition， I will help build the tower！

3 In town， I see that the center of the square is already packed with people. While I am waiting for our turn to compete， my friend Tomeu comes to stand with me. “What if Im not ready? for? this，? Tomeu？”? I ask.? Tomeus? dark? eyes? sparkle? as? he? smiles? at? me.? “We are never ready， Jordi. None of us who compete knows for sure how it will go.” He gestures towards the tower going up in front of us. “Just like these people， you must have faith in others. You must trust those below who lift you up， and you must trust yourself.” Tomeu pats me on the shoulder. “Have focus. Have faith.” I nod to show that I understand. I will do my best to follow his suggestions. Soon， too soon， it is our turn.

4 Dad and several strong men make the base for our tower. Four smaller men create a strong second level. Our tower is growing taller and taller. I watch as Mom climbs nimbly （敏捷地） up. She and my aunt form the fifth level.

5 Then suddenly it is my turn. Tomeu and I will make up the sixth level. Each of the castellers wears a waist belt， and I hold the belts tightly with my bare toes as I climb up. I pass the first two levels without difficulty， but as I go higher， the tower feels less steady. By the time I reach the fifth level， nerves make my hands sweat and my knees tremble， for I am very high off the ground.

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閱讀上面的短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個(gè)完整的故事。

注意：

1. 所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；

2. 續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好。

Paragraph 1：

I place my foot into Moms waist belt and try to stand， but it slips off.

Paragraph 2：

Tomeu and I grasp each others arms， and our tower is complete.

寫作導(dǎo)引

一、語篇研讀

（一）基本要素

[Where In 1.? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ?city When Today Who Jordi： having never been part of the tower before 2.? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ?it was so high

Tomeu， Jordis friend： 3.? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ?Jordi a lot

Jordis dad and several strong men： 4.? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ?the base for their tower

Jordis mom and aunt

What They joined a competition， and 5.? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ?finally. Why Because they 6.? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ?in each other and focus on the task. ]

（二）主題探索

What is the text about？ And what does the author want to tell us？

二、語言學(xué)習(xí)

（一）詞塊

[Expressions Chinese meanings 1. sit up 2. be hesitant to 3. be packed with 4. stand with 5. what if 6. for sure 7. have faith in 8. lift up 9. do ones best 10. make up ]

（二）句式

1. 倒裝句

Never before have I been part of the tower. （Para. 2）

我以前從來沒有成為這座塔的一部分。

2. 賓語從句

In town， I see that the center of the square is already packed with people. （Para. 3）

在城里，我看到廣場(chǎng)的中心已經(jīng)擠滿了人。

I nod to show that I understand. （Para. 3）

我點(diǎn)頭以表明我理解。

3. 狀語從句

Tomeus dark eyes sparkle as he smiles at me. （Para. 3）

當(dāng)Tomeu對(duì)我微笑時(shí)，他黑色的眼睛閃閃發(fā)光。

I watch as Mom climbs nimbly up. （Para. 4）

我看著媽媽敏捷地爬了上去。

Each of the castellers wears a waist belt， and I hold the belts tightly with my bare toes as I climb up. （Para. 5）

每個(gè)人堆城堡的參與者都系著腰帶，當(dāng)我爬上去的時(shí)候，我光著腳趾，并用腳趾緊抓著腰帶。

4. 定語從句

None of us who compete knows for sure how it will go. （Para. 3）

我們這些競(jìng)爭(zhēng)的人都不能確切知道它會(huì)如何發(fā)展。

You must trust those below who lift you up， and you must trust yourself. （Para. 3）

你必須信任下面那些舉起你的人，而且你必須相信自己。

（三）即學(xué)即用

1. 我絕對(duì)不會(huì)忘記你和我們?cè)谝黄鸬娜兆?。（使用倒裝句）

2. 就在這時(shí)，我第一次注意到我們的主人穿著他那件漂亮的綠色外套，戴著他那頂黑色的絲綢帽子。（使用賓語從句）

3. 當(dāng)我在車站等車的時(shí)候，我聽到一陣很大的聲響。（使用狀語從句）

4. 只有那些發(fā)出自己聲音的人才能爭(zhēng)取到權(quán)利。（使用定語從句）

三、續(xù)寫技能

讀后續(xù)寫中，情緒描寫有兩種方法：一種是直接描寫法，即句子中直接出現(xiàn)表達(dá)情緒的單詞；另外一種是間接描寫法，通過表情和動(dòng)作來體現(xiàn)某種情緒。大部分讀后續(xù)寫的故事中，人物是從“負(fù)向”情緒，最終轉(zhuǎn)化到“正向”情緒的。

●“負(fù)向”情緒之恐懼、絕望

恐懼：

1. He turned to me， with his eyes full of horror. 他轉(zhuǎn)向我，眼中滿是驚恐。（間接描寫）

2. Realizing what had happened， a flood of fear welled up in him. 意識(shí)到發(fā)生了什么，一陣恐懼涌上他的心頭。（直接描寫）

3. At the sight of the wolf， I froze with terror. 一看到狼，我嚇得僵住了。（間接描寫）

4. At the sight of the wolf， I felt that my throat tightened and my knees felt weak. 一看到狼，我感到喉嚨發(fā)緊，膝蓋發(fā)軟。（間接描寫）

絕望：

1. Tony felt hopeless/desperate. 托尼感到絕望。（直接描寫）

2. Tony was suddenly thrown into a world of darkness and sank into hopelessness. 托尼突然陷入了一個(gè)黑暗的世界，并且陷入了絕望。（間接描寫）

●“正向”情緒之快樂

1. Seeing her present， she was overflowing with happiness. 一看到她的禮物，她充滿了幸福。（直接描寫）

2. Joy welled up inside her. 她心中涌起了喜悅。（直接描寫）

3. Hearing this， everybody was wild with joy. 一聽到這句話， 每個(gè)人都欣喜若狂。（直接描寫）

4. To his joy， his son won first prize in the English Speech Contest. 令他高興的是，他的兒子在英語演講比賽中獲得了一等獎(jiǎng)。（直接描寫）

5. Laughter lingered around the room. 笑聲在房間里縈繞。（間接描寫）

6. She laughed， with her eyes shining with excitement. 她笑了，眼睛里閃爍著興奮的光芒。（間接描寫）

7. Her face lit up/brightened/glowed with pleasure when I gave her the present. 當(dāng)我給她禮物時(shí)，她的臉上煥發(fā)出了光彩。（間接描寫）

8. A bright smile appeared on/spread across her face when she saw the present. 當(dāng)她看到禮物時(shí)，她的臉上露出了燦爛的笑容。（間接描寫）

四、續(xù)寫布局

根據(jù)續(xù)寫第一段的段首句“我把腳放進(jìn)媽媽的腰帶里，試著站起來，但腳滑脫了?！笨芍?，第一段內(nèi)容應(yīng)描寫活動(dòng)中出現(xiàn)的一些狀況。再結(jié)合續(xù)寫第二段的段首句可知，“我們”的塔完成了。由此倒推，“我們”并沒有因?yàn)橥话l(fā)狀況而放棄。因而，續(xù)寫第一段還可以描寫“我們”的應(yīng)對(duì)措施。具體情節(jié)發(fā)展，可根據(jù)以下問題鏈推測(cè)：

1. How do I feel？

2. What do I do next？

3. How do my team members react？

根據(jù)續(xù)寫第二段的段首句“Tomeu和我抓住彼此的胳膊，我們的塔完成了?！笨芍?，“我們”的人堆城堡建得非常成功?！拔摇睍?huì)有哪些情感變化和感悟呢？具體情節(jié)發(fā)展，可根據(jù)以下問題鏈推測(cè)：

1. How do I feel at that moment？

2. What lesson do I learn from this experience？