2020年9月大學(xué)英語四、六級(jí)作文試題評(píng)析(一)

賈從永

四級(jí)

Directions：

For this part.you are allowed 30 minutes to write an essay on online dictionaries.You can start your essay with the sentence“Online dictionaries are becoming increasingly popular”.You should write at least 120 words but no more than 180 words.

本次大學(xué)英語四級(jí)考試的三道作文試題都屬于分析現(xiàn)象型。此類型題目的特點(diǎn)是提出一個(gè)社會(huì)現(xiàn)象，請(qǐng)考生進(jìn)行分析。比如本題請(qǐng)考生分析的社會(huì)現(xiàn)象是在線詞典越來越受歡迎。

我們可以把這篇作文寫成三個(gè)段落。第一段提出所要分析的現(xiàn)象——在線詞典越來越受歡迎。第二段對(duì)這種現(xiàn)象進(jìn)行分析，我們一般從分析原因的角度展開，即分析為什么在線詞典越來越受歡迎。這種寫法的優(yōu)點(diǎn)是層次分明、條理清晰。當(dāng)然，分析原因沒有統(tǒng)一的標(biāo)準(zhǔn)答案，只要能自圓其說就行。我們不妨從以下三個(gè)方面分析在線詞典越來越受歡迎的原因。第一，在線詞典使用方便。你不必翻頁，只需點(diǎn)擊一下鼠標(biāo)便可查到詞義。第二，在線詞典更新快，可以查到最新的詞義。此外，在線詞典大多免費(fèi)，而紙質(zhì)詞典卻往往價(jià)格不菲。無怪乎越來越多手頭緊的大學(xué)生轉(zhuǎn)而鐘情于在線詞典。

這篇作文可以用預(yù)測(cè)法結(jié)尾。第三段先指出盡管在線詞典受歡迎，但不大可能完全取代紙質(zhì)詞典。紙質(zhì)詞典仍會(huì)使用很長(zhǎng)一段時(shí)間才會(huì)過時(shí)。下面請(qǐng)看參考范文：

Online dictionaries are becoming increasingly popular among college students.According to a recent survey in Shanghai，84.2 percent of those polled on campus said they prefer an to a paper online dictionary paper one when they need to look up a word.

A combination of factors may be responsible for the increasing popularity of online dictionaries. First and foremost is efficiency： you dont have to flip through the pages， for the meaning of a word is only a click away. Online dictionaries also have the advantage of being constantly updated. You can find the meaning of some buzzwords even popping up last month. Besides， online dictionaries are mostly free of charge， while a print dictionary usually carries a hefty price tag.No surprise growing numbers of cash-strapped college students have switched from physical dictionaries to online ones.

Despite the popularity， it seems unlikely that online dictionaries can replace their physical counterparts altogether. Traditional dictionaries will still be in use for a long time before becoming a thing of the past. （169 words）

語言亮點(diǎn)借鑒：

1.A combination of factors may be responsible for the increasing popularity of online dictionaries.也許是多種因素造成了在線詞典越來越受歡迎。本句是第二段的主題句，置于段首以收醒目之效。

2.First and foremost is efficiency：you dont have to flip through the pages， for the meaning of a word is only a click away.首先是效率高。你無須翻頁，因?yàn)橹恍椟c(diǎn)擊鼠標(biāo)便可查到一個(gè)單詞的意思。first and foremost首先。

3.Besides，online dictionaries are mostly free of charge，while a print dictionary usually carries a hefty price tag.此外，在線詞典大多免費(fèi)，而紙質(zhì)詞典通常價(jià)格不菲。carry a hefty/high price tag價(jià)格不菲。

4.No surprise growing numbers of cash-strapped college students have switched from physical dictionaries to online ones.越來越多手頭拮據(jù)的大學(xué)生從紙質(zhì)詞典轉(zhuǎn)向了在線詞典，這就不足為奇了。No surprise（that）不足為奇。

5.cash-strapped手頭緊的。

六級(jí)

Directions：

For this part.you are allowed 30 minutes to write an essay on the saying“Beauty of the soul is the essential beauty.”You should write at least 150 words but no more than 200 words.

2020年9月大學(xué)英語六級(jí)考試的三道作文試題都屬于闡釋道理型。這類作文的題目一般是一句諺語、俗語或者名言，傳達(dá)一種人生感悟或處世之道。比如，本題要求考生闡述對(duì)美的一種看法：心靈美才是美的本質(zhì)。

這篇作文可以寫成三個(gè)段落。第一段先把題目中的諺語、俗語或名言引出來，并用通俗的語言對(duì)它加以解釋，此為立論。第二段論述這句諺語、俗語或名言的正確性。我們要論述一個(gè)抽象的道理，最容易下筆的方法是舉例論證。為了增強(qiáng)說服力，我們最好能舉出名人或偉人的事例。比如，本文不妨以英國著名女影星奧黛麗·赫本為例。奧黛麗·赫本曾主演《羅馬假日》《蒂凡尼的早餐》等多部經(jīng)典電影。她以天生麗質(zhì)而著稱，但更為世人所稱道的是她的心靈美。她曾擔(dān)任聯(lián)合國兒童基金會(huì)的親善大使，親赴不少飽受饑荒和戰(zhàn)亂的國家和地區(qū)，為貧困兒童吶喊、呼吁和募捐。正是因?yàn)樗倪@些善舉，她被人們當(dāng)成美的典范。這樣通過奧黛麗·赫本的例子，我們就證明了雖然外在美很重要，但心靈美才是根本的美。當(dāng)然，我們?cè)谡撌鲋幸膊槐貫榱藦?qiáng)調(diào)心靈美而否認(rèn)外在美。事實(shí)上，心靈美與外在美是相輔相成、并行不悖的。

本文可以用建議法結(jié)尾，即第三段先重述本文的主題，指出外表美固然重要，但心靈美乃是美的根本，然后號(hào)召讀者更加重視心靈美。下面請(qǐng)看參考范文：

When it comes to true beauty， there is an old saying which goes “Beauty of the soul is the essential beauty.” It means that though outer beauty is admirable，a person with a beautiful soul is truly beautiful.

Audry Hepburn is a perfect example. One of the greatest screen legends， she is known for her astonishing physical beauty. But she is most remembered for her beauty of the soul. After retiring from cinema， she dedicated herself to charity work in developing countries. She traveled the world raising funds to help the needy by clothing them and providing them with food. She impressed us with her sense of responsibility to relieve the suffering of starving children. Outer beauty captures the eyes， but inner beauty captures the heart. Her dedication to the wellbeing of children of third world countries made her the epitome of beauty.

Nice outer appearance is a good thing， but inner beauty is what truly shines.Lets attach more importance to the purity of our soul， for， essentially， beauty lies in the beauty of the soul. （179 words）

語言亮點(diǎn)借鑒：

1.When it comes to true beauty，there is an old saying which goes“Beauty of the soul is the essential beauty.”談到真正的美，有一句老話說，“心靈美才是本質(zhì)的美”。

2.Audry Hepburn is a perfect example.奧黛麗·赫本就是一個(gè)極好的例子。

3.One of the great screen legends.she is known for her astonishing physical beauty.作為銀幕上的一個(gè)大傳奇人物，她以令人驚嘆的美貌而著稱。one of the greatest screen legends是主語she的同位語，置于主語之前是為了保持句子的平衡。

4.Outer beauty captures the eyes，but inner beauty captures the heart.外在的美引人注目，內(nèi)在的美俘獲人心。

5.Her dedication to the well-being of children of third world countries made her the epitome of beauty.她致力于第三世界國家兒童的福祉，這使她成為美的典范。

6.Nice outer appearance is a good thing，but inner beauty is what truly shines.外表漂亮是件好事，但內(nèi)在的美才真正讓人光彩奪目。