Me

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Im a middle-school student in Yangying Middle school. My name is Liu Lei. Im fourteen years old.

Im in Grade one① this year. I like English very much and Im in charge of our English study. Some of my classmates often ask me to help them with their English. Its an② interesting work and I like it.

Im a gentle boy like a girl. I have bright， beautiful and big eyes. I dont get angry easily. Im happy all the time. If someone asks me to help him， I am always ready to help and my teachers always praises me on③ that. I can finish all homework on time.

I like reading all kinds of books and newspaper especially the books on study. I didnt read them careful④ before. But now I can read them even more carefully. And now I come to know that books are my best friends.

山東省梁山市揚(yáng)營中學(xué)七年級(jí)（2）班 劉磊

點(diǎn)評(píng)

1. 優(yōu)點(diǎn)：

本文大都采用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)寫成，全文語言流暢、簡練，且句子通順，富有童趣。

2. 需要修改的地方：

①one改為One。Grade One為專有名詞。

②去掉an。work是不可數(shù)名詞。

③on改為for。praise sb. for sth.意為“稱贊某人做某事”。

④careful改為carefully。修飾動(dòng)詞用副詞carefully。

3. 評(píng)分：

按中考英語作文滿分15分的評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)，本文修改前可得13分。endprint