My Wonderful Day

李蕊

石繼忠 男，1989年參加工作，中學高級教師、濟寧市骨干教師、市級教學能手；在工作中，立足實際，認真搞好教學，創(chuàng)造性地開展學校的教育教學、教改科研工作，在教育這片田園里勤奮耕耘，積極探索，不斷改進教學手段，吸收先進的教育理念，在多年的英語教學工作中，積累了豐富的教學經(jīng)驗，形成了自己獨特的教學方法；從教以來一直擔任初中畢業(yè)班的教學工作，在歷年的中考中，所執(zhí)教的班級都取得了優(yōu)異的成績，受到學校和社會各界的一致好評；曾先后在省級、國家級報刊發(fā)表論文一百多篇，現(xiàn)擔任《英語周報》《英語輔導報》《學生英語報》《英語畫刊》《英語園地》等多家報刊的特約編輯。

Its October 1st today， the National Day. I wanted to go out with my parents. Unfortunately， they were going to see some pieces of furniture. So I have to stay at home. In the① fact， I was now the real master of my house. I could do whatever I wanted to do. Its so wonderful. I opened the icebox and took out some delicious food. I had such a good appetite today than ever before. I began to eat as many② as possible. Then I turned on the TV and watched the basketball match. It was an exciting match and I was interested in it. After that I called Li Hua at 7221047 and said “Hello， dear friend. Shall we go and play football today？” He answered， “OK， I just want to invite you to play it， too. Lets go together.” We enjoyed ourselves for two hours in the open air.

After getting to③ home， I took a bath and hummed a classical song at the same time. Then I went to the kitchen and did the cooking for my family. My parents enjoyed the lunch very much and were very pleased with me.

I felt a little tired and went to bed. I fell asleep very soon and had a wonderful dream. In the dream， I could not helping saying， “How④ a wonderful day it is！”

1. 優(yōu)點：

這是記敘生活中的一天的記敘文。整篇文章首尾呼應。文章清楚地記敘了國慶節(jié)這天的活動，圍繞著一個中心“A Wonderful Day”展開。

2. 需要修改的地方：

①去掉the。in fact意為“事實上”。

②many改為much。as much as possible意為“盡可能多地”。

③去掉to。get home意為“到家”。

④how改為what。引導感嘆句，后接名詞時用what。

3. 評分：

按中考英語作文滿分15分的評分標準，本文修改前可得13分。