Pop Music

Pop Music

Do you like pop music？ I like it very much. Which pop star do you like best？ I like Jay Chou. Though he is not handsome， but① he sings very well. I think he is one of the best singers in China.

Many singers are very beautiful， but they do not sing well， so I dont like them. If a singer sings very well， he or she will have a lot of fans， even though he or she is not good-looking. If a singer sings well and has a good look at same② time， it will be perfect. He or she must be loved by his or her fans. Such singers are： Wang Fei， Liu Dehua， Zhou Huajian， Wang Lihong， Song Zuying and so on.

Pop music is popular between③ young people all over the world. It can make you feel light-hearted and comfortable. It can even make you forget your sadness， worries and troubles. Listening to pop music is good to④ your health. If you often listen to pop music， you can live a happy life.

山東省梁山縣楊營中學(xué)初一（3）班 ?王貞貞

1. 優(yōu)點(diǎn)：

本文結(jié)構(gòu)嚴(yán)謹(jǐn)，層次分明，過渡自然。該文章寫的是小作者對(duì)流行音樂的喜愛，并對(duì)流行音樂歌手的相貌和水平表達(dá)了自己的看法，是一篇值得推薦的學(xué)生習(xí)作。

2. 需要修改的地方：

① 去掉but。but 和though不可以出現(xiàn)在同一句話中;

② 加上the。at the same time表示“同時(shí)”;

③ between 改為among。在這里表示三者及以上的要用among，兩者之中才用between;

④ to改為for。be good for意思是“對(duì)……有好處”。

3. 評(píng)分：

按中考英語作文滿分15分的評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)，本文修改前可得12分。