Dream Home

A castle looks really huge and beautiful. There are thick stone walls and tall towers. A king， a queen and their children might live in the castle. Inside the castle， there are many rooms. There is a big room called the throne room where the king and queen sit and make important decisions. And there are nice bedrooms for the royal family to sleep in. There is also a big hall for having parties and feasts. Outside the castle， there are usually nice gardens with colorful flowers and a moat with water around it. It makes the castle even more special and safe.

An igloo is a house made from snow and ice. It is built by the Inuit people. They cut blocks of snow and put them together in a round or dome shape. It’s really amazing how they can make a house like this. Inside the igloo， it’s not very big. There is a small place where a family can stay warm. They can sleep on furs. It helps them to survive in the very cold Arctic.

The tipi is made of long poles. This kind of house is used by some Native Americans." The poles are tied at the top and then covered with animal skins or canvas. It looks like a big cone. Inside the tipi， there is a fire pit in the middle. People can cook food and get warm by the fire. The tipi is very useful because the Native Americans could take it apart and put it together easily when they move from one place to another.

A bungalow doesn’t have any stairs. Everything is on one level. A bungalow usually has a low roof and a nice front porch. People can sit on the porch and enjoy the fresh air. Inside the bungalow， the rooms are all on the same floor. It makes it easy to move around. It’s a good choice for old people or those who have trouble walking up and down stairs.

Flats are on top of each other in a building. Flats are very common in cities. They can be small or big. Some flats have just one room and a kitchen， while others have several bedrooms. People live in flats because it’s easier to live close to where they work or study. In a building with flats， there are usually things like a lobby and elevators. Sometimes， there are even things like a gym or a pool. People who live in flats share some areas and can get to know their neighbors.

A caravan is like a small house that you can take with you. This home is on wheels and can be moved. It’s pulled by a car or a truck. There are different kinds of caravans. Some are simple and small， and some are really nice and have everything you need. Inside a caravan， there is a place to sleep， a small kitchen to cook in， and a place to sit. It’s great for people who like to travel and live in different places.

castle n.城堡 throne n.（君王的）寶座

igloo" n.（通常由雪塊砌成的）圓頂小屋

Inuit n.因紐特人 tipi n.美國印第安人的圓錐形帳篷

pole n.桿，柱 bungalow n.平房，小屋 caravan n.活動房車There is a big room called the throne room where the king and queen sit and make important decisions.有一個大房間叫作“王座室”，國王和王后在這里就座并做出重要決定?！癱alled the throne room”是過去分詞作后置定語，修飾前面的“a big room”，“where the king and queen sit and make important decisions”是定語從句，修飾“the throne room”。

What other different types of houses do you know？ Use the Internet to find out more and share with your classmates.

每個人都有一個夢想中的家，你夢想中的家是什么樣的？請你以“My Dream Home”為題寫一篇文章來介紹自己的夢想之家。要點應包括：

① Where is your dream home？

② What’s your dream home like？

③ Who do you want to live with？

④ What do you like to do in your dream home？

⑤ What do you think of your dream home？

My Dream Home

I dream of living in a house in the town. My family and I live in a house with two floors. It has a large garden with many beautiful flowers. I can smell the flowers in it.

On the first floor， there is a study. It’s a perfect place to enjoy books and some quiet time. On the second floor， there are a few nice bedrooms. The walls of each bedroom are painted in yellow and pink. And there is soft light in the rooms.

I live with my family in my dream home. The house is big， so we can take good care of them. We usually chat in the living room together. I enjoy playing chess with my grandpa. It is very interesting. I like jogging around the house in the morning.

This is my dream home. I love it very much！

建議加強文章的層次性和條理性，如第一段最后兩句對花園的描述和第二段都屬于描寫夢想家園，建議合并為一段。

為表達對夢想家園的憧憬之情，可適當增加細節(jié)描寫和表達人物感受的形容詞。

此處邏輯不清，代詞“we”和“them”指代不明確。

第三段中所做的事情和夢想家園的關(guān)系不夠緊密。建議正確使用銜接詞、銜接句和豐富的句式，使文章流暢，更清晰地展示句子之間的邏輯關(guān)系。

My Dream Home

I dream of living in a house in a small and peaceful town. My family and I live in a big house with two floors.

On the first floor， there is a study and a big living room. They are perfect places to enjoy wonderful books and some precious family time. On the second floor， there are a few nice bedrooms. The walls of each bedroom are painted in warm colors like light yellow or pink， and there is soft light in the rooms. When you walk in， you will feel really relaxed and comfortable. What’s more， there is also a large garden with many beautiful flowers in my dream home. Whenever I step into the garden， the sweet smell of the flowers fills the air.

I live with my family in my dream home. The house is so big that my grandparents can also live with us. In this way， we can take good care of them. We usually chat in the living room together. At weekends， I usually spend some time playing chess with my grandpa. I also like jogging around the house in the morning， enjoying the beautiful flowers in the garden.

This is my dream home. It’s full of happiness， and my family always have a great time. I love it very much！

（江蘇省靖江市城北實驗學校 劉瑾鈺）

升格文結(jié)構(gòu)清晰，內(nèi)容豐富，涵蓋了家庭生活的多個方面。小作者語言自然，情感真摯，通過增加的細節(jié)描寫，體現(xiàn)了對家的理解，尤其是提及照顧、陪伴老人，體現(xiàn)出小作者孝老愛親的好品質(zhì)。