2020年12月大學(xué)英語四、六級作文試題評析（二）

賈從永

四? ? ? 級

Directions：

For this part， you are allowed 30 minutes to write a composition on the topic “Changes in the Way of Communication”. You should write at least 120 words but no more than 180 words.

本題要求考生論述communication方式的變化。communication有多種意思，但是在本題中它的意思是“通信”，即傳遞信息的方式，如書信、電報、電話等。此外，本題是一篇論說文，所以考生在寫這篇作文時不能僅列舉通信方式的種種變化，還要分析其原因，做到敘議結(jié)合，以議為主。

本題可以寫成三個段落。

第一段提出所要討論的話題?？梢韵戎赋鋈缃裢ㄐ欧绞秸诮?jīng)歷著巨大的變化，然后列舉一些細節(jié)使這一論點具體化：我們幾乎每天都能看到有人通過手機與客戶談生意，或熱戀中的情侶通過視頻電話卿卿我我。

第二段分析通信方式變化的原因。為了使分析深入透徹，最好從兩三個方面展開。就本題而言，可以先指出科技發(fā)展是通信方式變化的推動力量。接著通過今夕對比論證這一點：過去人們的通信主要依靠寫信，信息傳遞緩慢，需要數(shù)月甚至數(shù)年才能得知對方音信;隨著互聯(lián)網(wǎng)問世，如今人們與地球另一邊的親友眨眼之間就能取得聯(lián)系。隨后指出另一個推動因素是人們生活水平的提高。比如，智能手機在過去是奢侈品，但如今它在人們的生活中已經(jīng)變得很平常。

本題可以用預(yù)測法結(jié)尾。第三段先指出科技在飛速發(fā)展，人們對信息的追求是無限的，然后預(yù)測未來人們將會有更新和效率更高的通訊方式。

下面請看參考范文：

Nowadays communication is undergoing dramatic changes. Rarely does a day go by that we do not see a man negotiating a deal with his client over the phone or a lovey-dovey couple billing and cooing on a video call.

Advances in technology are the driving force behind the changes. In the past， people kept in touch with each other mainly through writing letters. It took months or even years for them to hear from each other. However， with the advent of the Internet， people can now get in touch with their relatives or friends on the other side of the globe in a flash. Another contributing factor is the improvement in living standard. For example， the smart phone， once a luxury， has now become commonplace in peoples daily life.

Science and technology are advancing at a blistering pace. And peoples thirst for information knows no limit. Perhaps only time will tell what newer and more efficient means of communication we shall have in the coming decades. （166 words）

語言亮點借鑒：

1. Rarely does a day go by that we do not see a man negotiating a deal with his client over the phone or a lovey-dovey couple billing and cooing on a video call. 我們幾乎每天都能看見有人通過手機與客戶談生意，或者情意綿綿的情侶通過視頻電話卿卿我我。lovey-dovey過于情意綿綿的。bill and coo卿卿我我。

2. However， with the advent of the Internet， people can now get in touch with their relatives or friends on the other side of the globe in a flash. 然而隨著互聯(lián)網(wǎng)的誕生，如今人們在轉(zhuǎn)眼之間就能和地球另一邊的親友取得聯(lián)系。with the advent of… 隨著……的到來。in/like a flash轉(zhuǎn)瞬間。

3. Science and technology are advancing at a blistering pace. 科技正在飛速發(fā)展。at a blistering pace以極快的速度。

4. And peoples thirst for information knows no limit. 人們對信息的需求是無限的。

5. Perhaps only time will tell what newer and more efficient means of communication we shall have in the coming decades. 也許只有時間知道，未來幾十年我們將會有何種更新、更高效的通信方式。

六? ? ? 級

Directions：

For this part， you are allowed 30 minutes to write an essay on why students should be encouraged to develop the ability to meet challenges. You should write at least 150 words but no more than 200 words.

本題要求考生論述為什么應(yīng)該鼓勵學(xué)生培養(yǎng)應(yīng)對挑戰(zhàn)的能力。所以，本題論述的重點是培養(yǎng)應(yīng)對挑戰(zhàn)的能力對學(xué)生的重要意義。

本題可以寫三個段落。

第一段提出所討論的話題?？梢詮娜松錆M挑戰(zhàn)說起，接著列舉一些挑戰(zhàn)，使之具體化。然后順勢指出應(yīng)對挑戰(zhàn)的能力對學(xué)生至關(guān)重要。

第二段闡述培養(yǎng)應(yīng)對挑戰(zhàn)的能力對學(xué)生的重要意義。首先指出，積極應(yīng)對挑戰(zhàn)可以讓學(xué)生有機會成為最好的自己。不挑戰(zhàn)自己，就永遠不知道自己的實力。此為立論。然后從兩方面對此展開論述。首先，應(yīng)對挑戰(zhàn)能夠把學(xué)生塑造成一個善于交際的人，因為挑戰(zhàn)迫使他與別人溝通交流。其次，應(yīng)對挑戰(zhàn)還能夠使學(xué)生更加成熟?？梢砸妹绹髮W(xué)的一項研究，證明人們接受挑戰(zhàn)才會成長。

本題可以用建議法結(jié)尾：第三段先指出應(yīng)對挑戰(zhàn)能夠讓人們發(fā)揮才干，因而是一項至關(guān)重要的能力，然后建議學(xué)校領(lǐng)導(dǎo)鼓勵學(xué)生提高應(yīng)對挑戰(zhàn)的能力。

下面請看參考范文：

Life is full of challenges—injury， illness， unemployment， divorce， or loss of loved ones， to name just a few. Oftentimes， a misfortune befalls us when we least expect it. Therefore， the ability to meet challenges is essential for the younger generation.

Tackling challenges head-on gives a student the opportunity to become the best version of himself. If he doesnt challenge himself， he will never realize what he can become. For instance， dealing with challenges molds a student into an expert communicator， as tackling challenges forces him， in a helpful way， to interact with others. Taking on challenges can also make a mature student. A Stony Brook University study polled over 100 leaders in various fields and concluded that people dont grow when things are easy; they grow only when they face challenges.

An old saying has it that a smooth sea never makes a skillful sailor. Tackling challenges brings out the best in a student and is therefore an essential life skill. It is advised that school authorities encourage students to develop the ability to overcome lifes obstacles. （178 words）

語言亮點借鑒：

1. Oftentimes， a misfortune befalls us when we least expect it. 不幸經(jīng)常在最預(yù)想不到的時候降臨到我們頭上。

2. Tackling challenges head-on gives a student the opportunity to become the best version of himself. 正面應(yīng)對挑戰(zhàn)讓學(xué)生有機會成為最好的自己。head-on迎面地，正面地。

3. An old saying has it that a smooth sea never makes a skillful sailor. 有句老話說，平靜的大海造就不出熟練的水手。An old saying has it that是引用諺語、俗語時常見的表達方式。

4. Tackling challenges brings out the best in a student and is therefore an essential life skill. 應(yīng)對挑戰(zhàn)可以最大限度地激發(fā)學(xué)生的潛能，因而是一種至關(guān)重要的生活技能。

5. It is advised that school authorities encourage students to develop the ability to overcome lifes obstacles. 建議學(xué)校領(lǐng)導(dǎo)鼓勵學(xué)生培養(yǎng)戰(zhàn)勝人生挑戰(zhàn)的能力。It is advised that… 是提建議的常用句型。? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ?□