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在讀后續(xù)寫備考中,筆者發(fā)現(xiàn),大部分同學經(jīng)過一段時間練習后,能夠基本完成故事情節(jié)的架構并完成寫作任務。但有的同學可能是東拼西湊,在湊夠詞數(shù)后就匆匆結尾,甚至還有部分同學沒有完成結尾。雖然有部分基礎較好的同學能在規(guī)定時間內結尾,但大多也只是一個簡單的“自然式”結尾,勉強完成寫作任務,不能給閱卷老師眼前一亮的感覺。為了幫助同學們寫好續(xù)寫的結尾,給文章起到“畫龍點睛”的作用,筆者總結了三種簡單易學又能有效點題的結尾方式。
一、用強調句型
強調句型“It is/was+被強調部分+that/who+其他部分”屬于高級句型的一種。把這個句型用在結尾,強調故事的時間、人物或事情本身,能很好地起到點題的作用。以下是筆者積累的在不同主題的文章中經(jīng)常用到的句子,僅供大家參考。
1. It was Toms selflessness that taught me the value of kindness. 正是Tom的無私使我明白了善良的寶貴。
2. It was on that day that I came to know a truth — a small act of kindness can make a big difference.正是在那一天,我領悟到了一個道理——小小善舉可以給世界帶來大不同。
3. It was a simple knot and an understanding heart that saved me from the awkward situation.正是這一個小小的繩結和一顆善解人意的心將我從尷尬中拯救出來。
4. It was with his fathers words that he realized family matters the most. 父親的一席話讓他意識到了家人才是世界上最重要的。
5. It was Henrys kindness and understanding that made me feel the warmth from our family.是Henry的善意和理解讓我真正感受到了來自家人的溫暖。
6. It was the special experience that made me realize forgiving is an important virtue. 正是這次特別的經(jīng)歷使我明白了諒解是多么寶貴的品質。
7. It was their love and support that saw me through different odds all these years. 這么多年以來,是他們的愛與支持陪伴著我度過了艱難的時光。
如果是強調謂語,則要用助動詞do, does, did。如:
8. Indeed, creativity and bravery do make a great difference in getting out of a fix. 確實,創(chuàng)意和勇敢是幫助我們擺脫困境的有力武器。(do強調make)
二、用名言名句
在寫作中若能根據(jù)文章主題,恰當運用名言名句,有效點題,定能夠吸引評卷者的眼球。在使用名言名句時,我們可以套用一個通用的固定句式:
Just as the saying goes,“Where there is a will, there is a way.”Now I couldnt agree more with those words. 正如俗話所說,“有志者,事竟成?!爆F(xiàn)在我完全同意這句話。
我們只需根據(jù)具體情況,從自己的資料庫中選擇合適的諺語即可,以下是筆者整理的比較適合用在高考讀后續(xù)寫中的諺語,僅供參考。
1. Roses given, fragrance in hand.贈人玫瑰,手有余香。
2. No pains, no gains./ No sweet without sweat. 沒有付出,就沒有回報。
3. A friend in need is a friend indeed. 患難見真情。
4. Never judge from appearance. 不可以貌取人。
5. Confidence in yourself is the first step on the road to success. 自信是成功的第一步。
6. Genius is nothing but labor and diligence. 天才出自勤奮。
7. Honesty is the best policy. 誠為上策。
8. Practice makes perfect. 熟能生巧。
三、用修辭手法
以下是可以用于讀后續(xù)寫結尾的一些美詞美句,它們通過運用多種修辭手法讓文章更有畫面感和美感,既能點題又能大大加強文章的可讀性。
1. Todays experience was like an everlasting flower, blooming in the river of my memories. 今天的經(jīng)歷將會像是一朵永不凋謝的花朵,永遠綻放在我的記憶里。(比喻)(bloom開花)
2. This special experience left a lasting mental picture in my mind, which I will never forget. 今日的這次特別的經(jīng)歷給我留下了刻骨銘心的記憶,我將永生難忘。(比喻)
3. With laughter lingering in the room, their sincere friendship blossomed in the summer like a flower that never fades. 伴隨著笑聲回蕩在房間里,他們真摯的友誼之花盛開在這個夏季,永不凋敗。(比喻)(linger回蕩,徘徊; blossom開花)
4. Alexs beam of smile seemed to wipe off Theos frustration and he was really expecting to be the next champion. Alex的微笑沖散了Theo心中的陰霾,他又開始對下一次的勝利充滿期待。(擬人,比喻)(frustration沮喪)
5. His words floated in the wind like a birds happy song. 他的話語回蕩在風中,就像鳥兒的歌聲一樣歡快動聽。(比喻)
6. Follow your dream and the universe will open doors where there are only walls. 追隨你的夢想吧,宇宙會在原本只有墻的地方為你敞開大門。(擬人)
7. Love matters more than anything, which can conquer /overcome /get the better of any difficulty. 愛勝過一切,它能打敗世間的任何困難。(擬人)
8. The cloud removed instantly, sunshine landed on the happy teardrops in my eyes. 剎那間,烏云散去,陽光灑在了我充滿喜悅的淚水上。(擬人)
此外,用“only +狀語”開頭的倒裝,以及not only ... but also…連接句子時的倒裝,也是一種不錯的結尾。如:
Only when we open up the door of our heart can we be bathed in the brilliant sunshine and enjoy the warmth of love. 只有當我們打開心門,我們才能沐浴在陽光中享受愛的溫暖。(比喻;倒裝)
總之,高考續(xù)寫的方向往往是積極向上的,結尾時通常弘揚一種正面的情感,如,“助人為樂、勤奮、友情、親情和自我成長”等。如2021年新高考全國Ⅰ卷讀后續(xù)寫講述的是孩子們精心為媽媽準備母親節(jié)早餐,經(jīng)歷一番波折之后,最終以闔家歡樂結尾。顯然,其主題為“親情”。我們可以套用上述這個句子“With laughter lingering around the room, the love among family blossomed in the summer like a flower that never fades.”望我們多多背誦,多多積累,建立自己的語料庫,并在考試中根據(jù)具體情況選用合適的句式結尾,爭取在讀后續(xù)寫中取得理想的分數(shù)。
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