胡君祥
作者跟隨他的叔叔到他森林里的家去體驗(yàn)大自然,期間在一只老虎的幫助下,作者得以蛇口逃生,然后與老虎成了親密朋友。
1. tremendous /trmends/ adj. 巨大的;極大的
2. lick /lk/ v. 舔
3. signify /sɡnfa/ v. 預(yù)示
4. growl /ɡral/ v. 低聲吼叫
My uncle was a forest officer and this time he brought me there. His house was in the forest. When we arrived, Eric saw us and came rushing to open the garden gate. He was an elderly man who did my uncle's cooking and other household work.
“How are you?” I called out. “I'm all right,” he said, “but Papal isn't.”
My uncle, who walked ahead of us, stopped and asked, “Why Eric, what is wrong with our friend?”
“From the day you went, she has not been eating properly,” answered Eric. My uncle looked worried.
“Who is Papal?” I asked Eric. “Why! Don't you know? Here she is.”
I turned round. My heart skipped a beat. There was Papal, a Royal Bengal tiger, giving my uncle a tremendous welcome by licking his face. Then she caught sight of me and came forward. I stood still while she sniffed me all over. But when she tried to lick my face, I always refused. Later I was told that Papal's mother was killed when she was only ten days old. I felt sorry for her.
Soon my uncle left for work. I wondered how to pass my time. There was a small pond behind the house and I liked to sit beside it. I got up. Immediately Papal moved her tail to signify she had seen me move. I could no longer bear the feeling of being constantly watched by two silent eyes. I walked off angrily and sat beside the pond. “WOOSH! ! !” ?I heard a splashing sound. I looked up. Papal had dived into the water and was swimming in the pond. Soon she came out of the pond and sat breathing in front of me. Then Papal growled.
After a while, Papal growled again—this time there was something urgent in her growl. I could not help turning back and looking at her. She was staring at something in front of me. I looked in the same direction and broke into a cold sweat! There was a snake less than six feet away!
When we arrived, Eric saw us and came rushing to open the garden gate.
翻譯:當(dāng)我們到達(dá)時(shí),埃里克看到了我們,沖過(guò)來(lái)去打開(kāi)花園的大門(mén)。
分析:When引導(dǎo)的是時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句,rushing為現(xiàn)在分詞作伴隨狀語(yǔ)。
閱讀上面的短文,根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫(xiě),使之構(gòu)成一個(gè)完整的故事。
注意:
1. 所續(xù)寫(xiě)短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右;
2. 續(xù)寫(xiě)部分分為兩段,每段的開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)已為你寫(xiě)好。
Paragraph 1:
The snake was ready to attack me.
Paragraph 2:
Then I found myself hugging Papal.
寫(xiě)作導(dǎo)引
一、分析語(yǔ)篇,梳理基本要素
要想續(xù)寫(xiě)內(nèi)容與所給材料內(nèi)容連貫、銜接緊密,必須充分了解所給材料大意。仔細(xì)閱讀所給材料,充分理解閱讀材料的內(nèi)容,掌握作者通過(guò)材料想要傳達(dá)的意思。
本文是一篇記敘文,文章分析如下:
二、閱讀續(xù)寫(xiě)開(kāi)頭語(yǔ),展開(kāi)合理想象
我們可以基于原文和續(xù)寫(xiě)段落首句提供的信息構(gòu)思要續(xù)寫(xiě)的故事情節(jié)。這一構(gòu)思分為四步:
第一步,根據(jù)已給出的文本判斷文章的立意。
根據(jù)文章標(biāo)題“The tiger rescued me from the snake”可推斷出本文的立意是“人與動(dòng)物的友情”。
第二步,根據(jù)續(xù)寫(xiě)第二段所給出的段首句倒推續(xù)寫(xiě)第一段一定要寫(xiě)什么。
分析一下第二段所給出的段首句“Then I found myself hugging Papal.”可知,續(xù)寫(xiě)第一段肯定要寫(xiě)Papal幫助作者從蛇口逃生。如此構(gòu)思能確保續(xù)寫(xiě)的兩段是能相銜接的。
第三步,圍繞續(xù)寫(xiě)第一段所給出的段首句進(jìn)行提問(wèn)構(gòu)思:
(1)What was the author's reaction when he saw the snake attacking him?
(2)How did the author escape from the snake?
(3)How did the tiger help the author escape?
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第四步,圍繞續(xù)寫(xiě)第二段所給出的段首句進(jìn)行提問(wèn)構(gòu)思:
(1)When the author found himself hugging the tiger, what did the author and the tiger do respectively?
(2)What was the author's relationship with the tiger after that?
(3)What happened to the author and the tiger later?
三、潤(rùn)色成篇
在續(xù)寫(xiě)的過(guò)程中要注意銜接的問(wèn)題,做到情節(jié)連貫,語(yǔ)言風(fēng)格一致。從銜接的部位來(lái)分,銜接有三種:1. 兩段的續(xù)寫(xiě)與所給短文的銜接;2. 每段的續(xù)寫(xiě)與續(xù)寫(xiě)段落首句之間的銜接;3. 續(xù)寫(xiě)的兩段之間的銜接。同時(shí)要注意語(yǔ)法、句型,以及所用詞的準(zhǔn)確性。比如,刻畫(huà)人物形象時(shí)要選用恰當(dāng)?shù)膭?dòng)詞使其栩栩如生;描寫(xiě)人物心理活動(dòng)時(shí)要善于使用一些形容詞或副詞使其細(xì)微深入。