河南鄭州十一中 谷戰(zhàn)峰
家境貧困的8歲小女孩珍妮在雜貨店看到了一條美麗的塑料珍珠項(xiàng)鏈, 在她的請(qǐng)求下,媽媽給她買下了那條項(xiàng)鏈。 可是,她的爸爸卻向她索要那條新買的項(xiàng)鏈……
難詞探意
1.grocery /'ɡr??s?ri/ n.雜貨店
2.twist /tw?st/ v.使彎曲;使扭曲
Jenny was a pretty eight-year-old girl.She had been the pride of her parents before she lost her legs in an accident.
One day when she and her mother were checking out at the grocery store, Jenny saw a plastic pearl necklace, by which she was totally defeated.How eagerly she wanted it! But when she saw the price, her heart sank a little.She gathered up her courage and asked her mother if she would buy it for her.Her mother said, “Well, it is a pretty necklace, but it costs an awful lot of money.I can buy you the necklace, but when we get home, we should make up a list of housework that you can do to pay for the necklace.” Jenny agreed immediately, feeling a burst of joy.So her mother bought the pearl necklace for her.Jenny worked on her housework determinedly and earnestly every day.Soon Jenny paid off the pearls.
Jenny had a very loving daddy.When Jenny went to bed, he would read Jenny her favorite story.One night when he finished the story, he said, “Jenny, do you love me?” “Oh, yes, Daddy, you know I love you,” the little girl said delightedly, with a broad smile on her face.“Well, then, give me your pearls.” Hearing that, Jenny froze there, an anxious expression twisting her face.“Oh! Daddy, not my pearls! But you can have Rosy, my favorite doll.Remember her? You gave her to me last year for my birthday.Okay?” “Oh no, darling, that's okay.” Her father brushed her cheek with a kiss, gently and calmly.“Good night, little one.”
A week later, her father once again asked Jenny after her story, “Do you love me?” “Oh yes,Daddy, you know I love you,” the little girl murmured softly, trying to escape from her father's eyes.“Well, then, give me your pearls.” “Oh, Daddy, not my pearls! But you can have Ribbons, my toy horse.Do you remember her? She is my favorite.” The little girl begged.“No, that's okay,” her father said, smiling broadly and sweetly and brushing her cheek again with a kiss.“God bless you, little one.Sweet dreams.”
Language Study
Useful expressions for creating a novel
1.expressions for describing emotions
want...eagerly 非常想要得到……
be totally defeated (心理上)被徹底地?fù)魯×?/p>
her heart sinks a little 她的心沉了一下
feel a burst of joy 感到一陣狂喜
2.expressions for describing behaviour
gather up her courage 鼓起勇氣
agree immediately 立刻答應(yīng)下來
work on her housework determinedly and earnestly every day 每天堅(jiān)定而認(rèn)真地做家務(wù)
say...delightedly 高興地說
brush her cheek with a kiss, gently and calmly 輕輕地吻她的臉頰,溫柔而平靜
murmur softly 喃喃地說
try to escape from her father's eyes 盡量回避她父親的眼神
beg 請(qǐng)求;乞求
3.expressions for describing expressions
smile broadly and sweetly 笑得又燦爛又甜蜜
with a broad smile on her face 臉上露出燦爛的微笑
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Reading Check
閱讀上面的短文,根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫,使之構(gòu)成一個(gè)完整的故事。
注意:
1.所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右;
2.續(xù)寫部分分為兩段,每段的開頭語已為你寫好;
3.續(xù)寫完成后,請(qǐng)用下劃線標(biāo)出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語。
Paragraph 1:
Paragraph 2:
Holding the plastic pearl his daughter offered, the father dragged out a blue box.______
寫作導(dǎo)引
一、析語篇,理要素
在做小說的讀后續(xù)寫時(shí),首先要明確小說的三個(gè)基本要素,即環(huán)境、人物和情節(jié)。 人物是小說的核心,情節(jié)是小說的骨架,環(huán)境是小說的背景。 小說中的人物多為典型人物,可以通過人物的外貌、動(dòng)作、語言、心理、神態(tài)進(jìn)行描寫,這些描寫也是分析小說人物形象的重要切口。 小說中的環(huán)境指人物活動(dòng)的環(huán)境和事情發(fā)生的背景,分為自然環(huán)境和社會(huì)環(huán)境。 自然環(huán)境描寫是指對(duì)人物活動(dòng)的時(shí)間、地點(diǎn)、季節(jié)、氣候及花草鳥蟲的描寫;社會(huì)環(huán)境描寫是指對(duì)人物活動(dòng)的具體背景、處所、氛圍以及人際關(guān)系等的描寫。 而故事情節(jié)包括開始、發(fā)展、高潮和結(jié)局等。 小說的開端交代背景,鋪墊下文;小說的發(fā)展刻畫人物,反映性格;小說的高潮表現(xiàn)沖突,揭示主題;而小說的結(jié)局深化主題,留下思考。
本文是一篇小說閱讀,文章分析如下:
二、創(chuàng)情節(jié),巧構(gòu)思
在創(chuàng)設(shè)小說的情節(jié)時(shí)要注意以下幾個(gè)問題:
1.情節(jié)要具有合理性,符合小說人物的形象;
2.情節(jié)要具有沖擊性,既在情理之中,又在意料之外;
3.情節(jié)要具有連貫性,故事情節(jié)合理地發(fā)展和延續(xù);
4.情節(jié)要具有目標(biāo)性,將續(xù)寫的情節(jié)聚焦在如何解決矛盾沖突上;
5.情節(jié)要具有積極性,傳遞正確的價(jià)值觀和正能量。
本次小說的讀后續(xù)寫,要始終把握“Love”這個(gè)主題,圍繞“珍妮拒絕爸爸的要求”這一沖突構(gòu)建情節(jié),凸顯愛的傳遞。 在此背景下寫作時(shí),我們?nèi)绻芊e極聯(lián)想,情節(jié)的形成也就水到渠成了。