邱世才
★話題概述
“情緒與情感”是英語(yǔ)書面表達(dá)中常見(jiàn)的話題。情緒是人們對(duì)客觀現(xiàn)實(shí)的一種特殊的反映形式,是對(duì)客觀事物是否符合自己需要而產(chǎn)生的心理體驗(yàn)。對(duì)于“情緒與情感”類的話題,在寫作時(shí),無(wú)論是對(duì)喜怒哀樂(lè)的表達(dá),還是就“如何保持良好的情緒或情感”提出建議,都要能有話可說(shuō)。
此類話題的寫作題目中常常會(huì)給出特定的提示信息,有些是對(duì)人的內(nèi)心情感或者對(duì)會(huì)引發(fā)人的情緒的提示。這是對(duì)考生的要求,考生寫作時(shí)要充分應(yīng)用這些信息。
對(duì)于描述在已經(jīng)發(fā)生過(guò)的事件中表露出來(lái)的喜怒哀樂(lè),要用一般過(guò)去時(shí)態(tài)來(lái)表示;對(duì)于如何保持良好的情緒,消除不良或消極的情感,多用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)或情態(tài)動(dòng)詞進(jìn)行組句。
★高頻詞語(yǔ)
1.名詞
cry 哭;叫喊
fear 害怕;懼怕
dream 夢(mèng)想
expression 表情
feeling 感情;情感
sense 感覺(jué);意識(shí)
smile 笑;微笑
pleasure 高興;愉快
regret 懊悔
pride 自豪;驕傲
hope 希望
wish 愿望
luck 幸運(yùn);運(yùn)氣
pity 遺憾;憐憫
trouble 苦惱
love 喜愛(ài)
shame 羞恥
surprise 驚奇;驚訝
memory 記憶;回憶
happiness 幸福;快樂(lè)
praise 表?yè)P(yáng);贊揚(yáng)
2.動(dòng)詞
cheer 歡呼;喝彩
feel 感受;覺(jué)得
worry 擔(dān)心;擔(dān)擾
trouble 使苦惱
seem 似乎;好像
expect 預(yù)料;期待
dream 做夢(mèng)
regret 感到遺憾
surprise 使驚奇
imagine 想象
3.形容詞
bored 煩悶的;厭倦的
excited 興奮的
nice 令人愉快的
glad / happy / pleased 高興的
proud 自豪的
lucky 幸運(yùn)的
nervous 焦慮的
angry 生氣的
sad 悲傷的
afraid 害怕的
crazy 瘋狂的
great 偉大的
patient 有耐心的
lonely 孤獨(dú)的
upset 失望的
nervous 緊張的
worried 擔(dān)心的
friendly 友好的
shy 害羞的
disappointed 失望的
4.短語(yǔ)
angry with sb. 對(duì)某人生氣
be angry at / with 對(duì)……氣憤
be afraid to do sth. 害怕做某事
be afraid of 害怕……
be excited about 對(duì)……感到興奮
be proud of 為……驕傲
be tired of 對(duì)……感到厭倦
cheer up 振奮起來(lái)
worry about 擔(dān)心;煩惱
to one's surprise 使某人驚訝的是
be pleased with 對(duì)……滿意
be bored with 對(duì)……煩悶
be glad about 對(duì)……(感到)高興
be crazy about 狂熱于……
be strict with sb. 對(duì)某人嚴(yán)格要求
be nervous about 對(duì)……緊張
★提分句型
1.That news is so surprising that we all feel surprised. 那則消息太令人吃驚了,我們都感到很驚訝。
2.I want to tell you that many students have the same problems as yours.我想告訴你,許多同學(xué)都有與你一樣的困難(疑惑)。
3.She was very pleased / satisfied with her exam results. 她對(duì)考試成績(jī)非常滿意。
4.You should calm down and relax. 你應(yīng)該冷靜和放松。
5.I felt... but I was very... 我感到……但是我十分……
6.It is known that... is good for... 眾所周知,……是對(duì)……是有益的。
7.sb. be very angry with me because I... 某人因?yàn)槲摇鴮?duì)我很生氣。
8.He is very nervous because he will... 他非常緊張,因?yàn)樗?/p>
★佳作賞評(píng)
How to deal with the stress
Problems and stress are normal in our life. Sometimes everyone may feel worried or sad. It's all right to tell others when you are anxious. It's good to communicate with your classmates, teachers or parents when you are in trouble. Thus, you can solve the problems from study or life easily.
Listening to music or taking part in outdoor activities is another way to help you get relaxed.
Try to smile at yourself and never keep silent about your problems.
Please do remember that you're not alone. No matter how many difficulties we have, I believe all of them can be overcome in the end.
【權(quán)威點(diǎn)評(píng)】
本篇習(xí)作結(jié)構(gòu)完整,層次分明,語(yǔ)句流暢,表達(dá)自然。對(duì)于如何處理我們?nèi)粘I钪械膲毫o予了比較好的建議,并提出了具體對(duì)策。
作者圍繞“如何處理壓力”的主題展開(kāi)論述。首先從生活中有困難和壓力是正常之事,每個(gè)人都會(huì)有苦惱、焦慮的時(shí)候。到與人交流,一定要告訴別人你的煩惱。再到遇到任何困難時(shí),與同學(xué)交流,和老師、家長(zhǎng)及時(shí)溝通。最后,就如何輕松、快樂(lè)地學(xué)習(xí)和生活等作了適當(dāng)?shù)陌l(fā)揮。
1.在行文時(shí),作者用詞非常豐富,對(duì)情緒類用詞,如worried、sad、anxious、relaxed、silent、alone的選用比較貼切。
2.文中使用了非常好的短語(yǔ),如feel worried or sad、all right、be good to、communicate with、in trouble、solve the problems、listen to、take part in、outdoor activities、try to do sth.、no matter、in the end等。
3.“It's good to communicate with your classmates, teachers or parents when you are in trouble.”“No matter how many difficulties we have, I believe all of them can be overcome in the end.”等多種復(fù)合從句結(jié)構(gòu)和“Listening to music or taking part in outdoor activities is another way to help you get relaxed.”“Try to smile at yourself and never keep silent about your problems.”等含有非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞結(jié)構(gòu)的綜合運(yùn)用,豐富了語(yǔ)言內(nèi)容,使文章錦上添花。
★題例解析
英國(guó)作家薩克雷曾說(shuō):“播種一種行為,收獲一種習(xí)慣;播種一種習(xí)慣,收獲一種性格;播種一種性格,收獲一種命運(yùn)。”在生活中,一定有好的習(xí)慣伴隨你的成長(zhǎng)。請(qǐng)你以“Good habits make me happier”為題寫一篇短文。
要點(diǎn)如下:
1.圍繞主題進(jìn)行敘述,并在文中說(shuō)明原因。
2.寫出具體計(jì)劃,也可以講述一段與主題有關(guān)的故事或經(jīng)歷。
3.字跡工整,內(nèi)容完整、連貫,語(yǔ)言準(zhǔn)確、規(guī)范。
注意事項(xiàng):
1.詞數(shù)80~100(文章開(kāi)頭句已給出,但不計(jì)入總詞數(shù))。
2.可適當(dāng)增加某些細(xì)節(jié),以使行文連貫。
Good habits make me happier
Good habits are important in our lives.
【寫作提示】
1.審題立意
這是一篇以“Good habits make me happier”為題的話題作文。主題確定后,就要圍繞該主題來(lái)突出強(qiáng)調(diào)“你擁有哪種好習(xí)慣”“為什么這種好習(xí)慣會(huì)使你快樂(lè)”等內(nèi)容。時(shí)態(tài)為一般現(xiàn)在時(shí),以第一人稱為敘述主體。
2.謀篇布局
此文應(yīng)根據(jù)要點(diǎn)采取“總—分—總”的結(jié)構(gòu)進(jìn)行寫作,并圍繞主題講述一段與自己生活有關(guān)的故事或經(jīng)歷。最后,提出自己的感悟。
3.語(yǔ)句表達(dá)
寫作時(shí),避免使用中式英語(yǔ),盡量用熟悉的句子或短語(yǔ)。語(yǔ)法要正確,表達(dá)要符合英語(yǔ)習(xí)慣,注意時(shí)態(tài)、時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)的搭配及主謂一致的問(wèn)題。適當(dāng)使用連詞,使上下文聯(lián)系緊密,符合邏輯關(guān)系,表達(dá)具有條理性。也可根據(jù)自己的實(shí)際水平,適當(dāng)用一些重點(diǎn)句型或復(fù)合句式,為習(xí)作增色加分。例如:
I think (that) reading is a good habit of mine. 我認(rèn)為讀書是我的一個(gè)好習(xí)慣。
think后接的是一個(gè)賓語(yǔ)從句,關(guān)系代詞that可省可不省。句子很短,但是表達(dá)的內(nèi)容很豐富。
It can also help me learn some know
ledge which I can't learn in class. 它還能幫助我學(xué)習(xí)到一些我在課堂上學(xué)不到的知識(shí)。
I can't learn in class是由which引導(dǎo)的定語(yǔ)從句。
To keep this good habit, I will join a reading club in the future. 為保持這個(gè)好習(xí)慣,我將會(huì)加入一個(gè)讀書俱樂(lè)部。
To keep this good habit是由動(dòng)詞不定式作目的狀語(yǔ)的句式結(jié)構(gòu)。
【參考范文】
Good habits make me happier
Good habits are important in our lives. They influence us a lot in many ways. I think reading is a good habit of mine.
Every day, I read books for at least half an hour. Before I go to bed, I will read some books first. I think reading can broaden my horizon. It can also help me learn some knowledge which I can't learn in class. Reading brings me happiness and confidence and these make me a better person. To keep this good habit, I will join a reading club in the future.
I think reading is really a good habit and I'll keep it forever.
★即時(shí)練筆
距中考大約只有一個(gè)月的時(shí)間了,面對(duì)每天的作業(yè)、考試以及父母的期盼,同學(xué)們深感壓力之大。英語(yǔ)課上,老師讓大家介紹自己喜歡的放松方式及其原因。假如下面表格是你們的發(fā)言,請(qǐng)根據(jù)內(nèi)容提示,以“How to relax ourselves”為題寫一篇英文短文。
具體要求:
1.應(yīng)包括圖表中的全部信息,做到條理清楚,行文連貫,段落分明。
2.詞數(shù)不少于80,開(kāi)頭已給出,但不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。
How to relax ourselves
Different people have different ways to relax themselves.