Collection

石繼忠

【欄目要求】

1. 將學(xué)生習(xí)作根據(jù)中考分值給出成績； 2. 在應(yīng)該修改的地方劃線并標(biāo)注序號；

3. 根據(jù)所標(biāo)序號進(jìn)行修改并說明修改的理由； 4. 給學(xué)生習(xí)作點(diǎn)評<優(yōu)點(diǎn)與不足>；

5. 請點(diǎn)評名師提供簡歷一份，包括：學(xué)校、職務(wù)、職稱、榮譽(yù)、教研教學(xué)成果、照片一張。

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男 1989年參加工作，中學(xué)高級教師、濟(jì)寧市骨干教師、市級教學(xué)能手；在工作中立足實(shí)際，認(rèn)真搞好教學(xué)，創(chuàng)造性地開展學(xué)校的教育教學(xué)、教改科研工作，在教育這片田園里勤奮耕耘，積極探索，不斷改進(jìn)教學(xué)手段，吸收先進(jìn)的教育理念；在多年的英語教學(xué)工作中，積累了豐富的教學(xué)經(jīng)驗，形成了自己獨(dú)特的教學(xué)方法；從教以來一直擔(dān)任初中畢業(yè)班的教學(xué)工作，在歷年的中考中，所執(zhí)教的班級都取得了優(yōu)異成績，受到學(xué)校和社會各界的一致好評；先后在省級、國家級報刊發(fā)表論文一百多篇，現(xiàn)擔(dān)任《英語周報》《英語輔導(dǎo)報》《學(xué)生英語報》《英語畫刊》《英語園地》等多家報刊的特約編輯。

Everyone has his or her own hobby. Collection is the one many people are interesting① in. They like collecting different things， such as stamps， scripts， paintings and so on. My hobby is collecting coins of different nations.

I collect coins because I treasure them as the works of art. The delicacy of a coin shows the actual strength of the nation. The coins of Switzerland， the Kingdom of clocks and watches， are the most graceful ones in all coins.

Most coins have a head portrait cast on the front side， such as American coins with the portraits of Gerorge Washington and Abreham Lincoln， Britain coins with the portrait of Elizabeth II， and some others② people who were famous in history. Some coins have the designs of buildings， animals and plants. They are symbols of their nations.

I collect coins also because I like the process of collection. A long period of time is needed in gathering one nations whole set of coins. It is very difficult of③ me to find the very coin I want. Sometimes I obtain a coin but I dont know which nation it comes from， therefore I must look around for books or ask some friends. No word can express the feelings of happiness when I finally found the value of it.

I have accumulated a great deal of knowledges④ about the history and culture of different nations through these small coins. Every coin could tell me a story as if it is my good friend. The coins I collected are my treasures. They will be my spiritual wealth in my lifetime.

山東省梁山縣楊營中學(xué)九（4）班 高翔

1. 優(yōu)點(diǎn)：

這篇文章結(jié)構(gòu)合理，體現(xiàn)了形式和內(nèi)容的統(tǒng)一。段與段之間沒有過渡詞，而是通過前后內(nèi)容自然地銜接成篇；每段各有重點(diǎn)，但始終不離主題。另外，準(zhǔn)確的詞語表達(dá)和多樣化的句型也為文章增添了不少光彩。

2. 需要修改的地方：

① interesting改為interested。interesting表示事物有趣， interested表示人感興趣。

② others去掉s。這里要用形容詞other修飾后面的名詞people。

③ of改為for。its+adj+for sb. to do為固定結(jié)構(gòu)。

④ knowledges去掉s。knowledge為不可數(shù)名詞。

3. 評分：

按中考英語作文滿分15分的評分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)，本文修改前可得14分。