話題作文
——旅游與交通①

福建 林飛軍

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介紹旅游常識、旅游路線、旅游經(jīng)歷、活動內(nèi)容,描述人文景觀,認識公共標識,選擇交通工具,談?wù)撀糜蔚男那榛蚋惺艿取?/p>

此類話題的作文體裁多為記敘文、說明文,有時也用于應(yīng)用文等。

★佳作賞評

Welcome to Liu Gong Island

The summer vacation is coming.Where would you like to visit？ Haven't you decided？ Come to Liu Gong Island!

Liu Gong Island is in the east of Weihai,which has an area of 3.15 km2.It is 4.08 km long,1.5 km wide.It will take you 20 minutes to get to the island from the travel port by ship.The history museum on the island is educational.The zoo is interesting to visit.And it is more interesting to travel around the island either on land or by boat.There are all kinds of trees and grass everywhere.It's very easy to travel to Weihai.You can come by bus,by train,or by plane.You can spend a day happily on the island.It is a good place to visit.Visitors from all over the world come to visit it every year.

Wish you a good trip.

【權(quán)威點評】這是一篇介紹旅游景點(劉公島)的記敘文。作者分別以對劉公島的引入、劉公島的介紹和自己的希望這三個自然段完成全文。

全文結(jié)構(gòu)完整,層次清晰,詳略得當,描寫細膩。閱讀短文,會使讀者對劉公島留下一種難以忘懷的印象。

文章中巧妙地運用了and,everywhere,either...or...等單詞和“Haven't you decided？ ”等句子,從而為習作增添了一定的色彩。

美中不足的是復合句子“Liu Gong Island is in the east of Weihai,which has an area of 3.15 km2.”的運用有些偏難,如果將其改為兩個簡單句子,將會更加簡單、易懂。

★思路點撥

該話題多采用“A visit to...”和“Welcome to...”等作為短文的標題(有時也可不用標題),并主要圍繞“總述引入——節(jié)描寫——概括點題”三個方面進行構(gòu)思成文。

景點介紹類的作文多采用一般現(xiàn)在時態(tài),并使用第一人稱或第二人稱。談?wù)撀糜谓?jīng)歷方面的作文經(jīng)常以一般過去時態(tài)來呈現(xiàn),人稱以第一人稱或第二人稱為主,適當使用第三人稱。

【高頻詞語】

arrive到達,bike自行車,bus公共汽車,cold冷的,cool涼爽的,hot熱的,cost花費,enjoy享受,happy高興的,holiday假日,journey旅行,like喜歡,map地圖,place地方,plane飛機,train火車,play玩,reach到達,route路線,spend度過,spring春天,summer夏天,take乘坐,tour旅行,travel旅行,trip旅游,vacation假日,visit游覽,interesting有趣的,wish祝愿,hope希望,bike ride騎自行車,have fun/have a good time/enjoy oneself玩得開心,take a photo拍照,get to到達,in the city在城市,in the countryside在鄉(xiāng)村,a visit to...去……的旅行,take a bus乘坐公交車,by train坐火車,in the south of在……的南部,travel to去某處旅行

【典型句型】

1.We will go to...我們將要去……

2.He likes(visiting)...他喜歡(游覽)……

3.What about going to...？ 去……怎么樣？

4.He will take a bus/train/plane to...他將乘坐公交(火車 /飛機)去……

5.We can go there by...我們可以乘坐……去那里。

6.The summer vacation is coming.暑假就要到了。

7.Have you ever been to...？ 你去過……嗎？

8.It's a...place to...它是一個……的地方。

★題例解析

你在假期里喜歡外出旅游嗎？假如你在五天的假期里去了柏林,請根據(jù)下面所給的提示內(nèi)容,以“A visit to Berlin”為題寫一篇英語短文,敘述你本次柏林之行的所見所聞,并談?wù)勛约旱母惺堋?/p>

要點提示：

1.花費了五天時間去柏林度假；

2.柏林是一個很大的城市；

3.步行或騎自行車外出游玩,并且品嘗了那里的美食。

具體要求：

1.短文應(yīng)覆蓋所有要點,也可適當增加某些細節(jié),使行文連貫；

2.詞數(shù)在80以上。

A visit to Berlin

【寫作提示】從所給的題目(A visit to Berlin)就可以看出,這是一篇記述柏林之行的游記文章。全文應(yīng)該通過幾個具體的小片段,展現(xiàn)所參觀之處的人文環(huán)境。

一、結(jié)構(gòu)安排

短文可以分為五個自然段。第一自然段直接點明本次參觀游玩的主題,即主要人物 (I)、所去的地點(Berlin)、所用時間 (five days)和旅游路線(travel from one area to aother area)等情況。第二、三自然段介紹出行旅游的方式(騎行或步行)。具體說明騎行需租車的費用(around 9 Euros per day)和騎行的好處(fast and easy)等。步行更為自由,還可以更多地了解到城市的歷史等。第四自然段記錄“我”所做的一件重要的事情——品嘗美食。通過對street food,restaurants等地方的考察,感覺這里的食物比較便宜。第五自然段可以寫出“我”對這次柏林之行的感受,從而抒發(fā)感情,結(jié)束全文。

二、詞語運用

從整個題目要求來看,可以首先使用句子“Have you ever been to Berlin？”巧妙地設(shè)置懸念,以激起讀者的閱讀欲望。為了體現(xiàn)語言表達的規(guī)范性,建議使用“If you really want to enjoy walking,there is also a free walking tour.”或“Though I may not ever live there,I'd happily go back and visit—over and over again.”之類的句子。句與句、段與段之間適當使用and then,for me,after this visit等過渡性詞語,以使各結(jié)構(gòu)之間的銜接更加恰到好處。

三、時態(tài)使用

本篇短文要以一般現(xiàn)在時態(tài)為主,適當使用一般過去時態(tài)和現(xiàn)在完成時態(tài)。

【參考范文】

A visit to Berlin

Have you ever been to Berlin？ I paid a visit to it for five days and enjoyed a happy time.Berlin is a big city.In order to make my travel easy,I divided the city into some areas,and then traveled from area to area.

It is a great place for a bike ride instead of walking around.It provides a fast and easy way to move around Berlin,and costs around 9 Euros per day to rent.

If you really want to enjoy walking,there is also a free walking tour.It begins at the Brandenburg Gate and lasts 3.5 hours.It took me through the center of the city,showed me all the highlights and gave me some history about the city.

For me,one of the most important things is to enjoy the local delicious food.We can judge (推斷)a city on how cheap it is by the food,and the food in Berlin is very cheap.And not just street food,even the restaurants there are a bargain.You can find a lot of meals for less than 5 Euros.Here is a truth for you—the lemons and the fresh vegetables are mouth watering.

After this visit,I enjoy Berlin more.Though I may not ever live there,I'd happily go back and visit—over and over again.

★嘗試練筆

參觀、旅游是每個人都十分期待的事情,每次外出游玩都會留下難以忘卻的記憶。假如你在暑假里隨父母去北京參觀了長城,請以“A visit to the Great Wall”為題寫一篇100詞左右的英語短文,記錄你們爬長城過程中的所見所聞,并談?wù)勀銓@次出行的感受。

具體要求：

1.體現(xiàn)上述題目要求的具體內(nèi)容,細節(jié)問題可適當發(fā)揮；

2.短文要求層次清晰,詳略得當,用詞準確。

A visit to the Great Wall

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