安徽合肥第四十六中學(xué) 七年級(jí)(8)班 徐緯霄
First of all,let me introduce myself.I’m a student in Grade Seven.I’m energetic and humorous.I’m a good student at school.and I often get good scores in the examinations.At the same time,I have some hobbies.
I like singing,especially humming songs.But my voice is not good to listen to.It’s very low.Sometimes my classmates joke about it:“You sing like an old man.”But I think it is just very special.Maybe I haven’t found the right way to sing.I think we shouldn’t worry it’s not good enough to listen to,just sing.
I like reading as well,especially the novels and biographies of famous people.I’m really interested in reading books.But I always read in bed.It’s bad for my eyes.So I’m near-sighted now.This is a bitter lesson for me.I hope everybody reads in right postures.
I’m also good at playing the piano.I have begun to learn it since I was five.I’m still learning it.At first,I didn’t like the heavy and difficult training.It was boring.I thought playing the piano is awful.But I didn’t give up.When I could play the piano well,I was proud and pleased.I won many prizes in piano competitions.I come to like it very much.So I think if a man is interested in something,he shouldn’t give it up.They will become his advantages.
Afterall,everyone should have theirown hobbies.All work and no play makes Jack a dull boy.Hobbies make us grow as a person.Hobbies will change into our habits.Keep them,we’ll be the winner.
教師點(diǎn)評(píng):
這是一篇七年級(jí)下學(xué)期學(xué)生的作品。文章文風(fēng)樸實(shí),層次清晰,過(guò)渡自然。作者首先開(kāi)門(mén)見(jiàn)山地點(diǎn)出主題,表明自己不光學(xué)習(xí)成績(jī)好,還有一些愛(ài)好;接著從唱歌、閱讀、彈琴三個(gè)方面展開(kāi)具體敘述;最后升華主題,說(shuō)明愛(ài)好能使得一個(gè)人成長(zhǎng)為全面的人,并受益終生。
當(dāng)然,如果作者能將愛(ài)好與未來(lái)的工作結(jié)合起來(lái),文章將會(huì)更加完美。