彭一晴
【欄目要求】
1. 將學(xué)生習(xí)作根據(jù)中考分值給出成績; 2. 在應(yīng)該修改的地方劃線并標(biāo)注序號(hào);
3. 根據(jù)所標(biāo)序號(hào)進(jìn)行修改并說明修改的理由; 4. 給學(xué)生習(xí)作點(diǎn)評(píng)<優(yōu)點(diǎn)與不足>;
5. 請(qǐng)點(diǎn)評(píng)名師提供簡歷一份,包括:學(xué)校、職務(wù)、 職稱、榮譽(yù)、教研教學(xué)成果、照片一張。
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本 期 點(diǎn) 評(píng) 名 師
于瑩 1992年畢業(yè)于山東師范大學(xué),中學(xué)高級(jí)教師,梁山縣優(yōu)秀教師,市級(jí)優(yōu)質(zhì)課一等獎(jiǎng),一直擔(dān)任初中英語的教學(xué)工作,連續(xù)多年在中考中取得優(yōu)異成績。2014年12月在山東省英語競賽中榮獲優(yōu)秀指導(dǎo)教師稱號(hào)。先后在《中學(xué)生英語》、《山東教育導(dǎo)報(bào)》、《現(xiàn)代中學(xué)生》、《初中生英語學(xué)習(xí)》、《英語輔導(dǎo)報(bào)》、《英語周報(bào)》、《學(xué)生導(dǎo)報(bào)》、《新課堂》等國家級(jí)、省級(jí)報(bào)刊上發(fā)表教學(xué)論文三十多篇。
Getting up early has been regarded as a good habit since old times. Many years ago, people thought that if we went to bed early and got up early, we would be energetic the whole day.
In the fact①, just as spring is the best season of a year, morning is the best time of a day. In the morning, the air is the freshest and people are usually in their best conditions. Many of us may have the experience that we memorize some things more quickly in the morning than at any other time of the day. If we do some exercise or just take a short walk in the morning, we will be full with② energy the whole day. Also, we will have enough time to prepare our works③ of the day if we get up early. In short, getting up early can do us a lot of good.
Let us to④ remember that getting up early is a good habit and try our best to keep it. We will certainly benefit a lot from it.
1. 優(yōu)點(diǎn):
本文談?wù)摰氖窃缙?。作者在第二段詳?shù)早起的多種好處,并在結(jié)尾大力提倡大家養(yǎng)成早起的好習(xí)慣。小作者引用名句,闡釋早起的種種益處。文章結(jié)構(gòu)清晰,條理清楚,語言流暢,是一篇值得推薦的學(xué)生習(xí)作。
2. 需要修改的地方:
① 去掉the。in fact意思是“實(shí)際上”;
② with改為of。be full of意思為“充滿……”,強(qiáng)調(diào)狀態(tài);
③ works去掉s。work作“工作”講時(shí)是不可數(shù)名詞;
④ 去掉to。Let us + 動(dòng)詞原形,意思為“讓我們……”。
3. 評(píng)分:
按中考英語作文滿分15分的評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn),本文修改前可得12分。