I Want to Be a Teacher

【欄目要求】

1. 將學(xué)生習(xí)作根據(jù)中考分值給出成績(jī)； 2. 在應(yīng)該修改的地方劃線并標(biāo)注序號(hào)；

3. 根據(jù)所標(biāo)序號(hào)進(jìn)行修改并說(shuō)明修改的理由； 4. 給學(xué)生習(xí)作點(diǎn)評(píng)<優(yōu)點(diǎn)與不足>；

5. 請(qǐng)點(diǎn)評(píng)名師提供簡(jiǎn)歷一份，包括：學(xué)校、職務(wù)、 職稱(chēng)、榮譽(yù)、教研教學(xué)成果、照片一張。

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于瑩 1992年畢業(yè)于山東師范大學(xué)，中學(xué)高級(jí)教師，山東省梁山縣優(yōu)秀教師，獲市級(jí)優(yōu)質(zhì)課一等獎(jiǎng)，一直從事初中英語(yǔ)的教學(xué)工作，連續(xù)多年在中考中取得優(yōu)異成績(jī)。2012年12月在山東省英語(yǔ)競(jìng)賽中榮獲優(yōu)秀指導(dǎo)教師稱(chēng)號(hào)。先后在《中學(xué)生英語(yǔ)》、《山東教育導(dǎo)報(bào)》、《現(xiàn)代中學(xué)生》、《初中生英語(yǔ)學(xué)習(xí)》、《英語(yǔ)輔導(dǎo)報(bào)》、《英語(yǔ)周報(bào)》、《學(xué)生導(dǎo)報(bào)》、《新課堂》等國(guó)家級(jí)、省級(jí)報(bào)刊上發(fā)表教學(xué)論文三十多篇。

I Want to Be a Teacher

“You want to be a teacher？ Dont be silly. Teachers are poorly paid and they have no power.” My friend was puzzling① when I told her I wanted to be a teacher in the future. Im not silly and Ill tell you my reasons.

Im determined to be a teacher because I have admired teachers very much since I was a little child. They are kind and respectable， like angels. They are learned， helpful and encouraging. Im determined to be a teacher because teachers can lead us for② success. Im determined to be a teacher because I can keep young and I can learn， change and grow up with my students. Im determined to be a teacher because I like the style of teachers—simple but free. The vacations will offer me an opportunity for writing， doing research work and anything I like.

Ill try my best to be an ideal teacher. Firstly， Ill study hardly③ to increase my knowledge and learn teaching skills. Secondly， Ill love my students and take proud④ in my profession. Thirdly， Ill trust in them， respect them and understand them.

I believe that teaching is the most honorable job in the world. Ill take it as my lifelong career. I will never regret my decision. I think my wish will come true. Do you think so？

山東省梁山縣楊營(yíng)一中初二 高成浩

1. 優(yōu)點(diǎn)：

本文以反意設(shè)問(wèn)句開(kāi)頭，突出了主題。本文層次清晰，語(yǔ)言得當(dāng)，銜接緊湊，說(shuō)服力強(qiáng)，是一篇值得推薦的學(xué)生習(xí)作。

2. 需要修改的地方：

① puzzling改為puzzled。修飾人時(shí)用puzzled，表示“感到疑惑的”；

② for改為to。lead to，固定搭配，表示“引起；導(dǎo)致；通向”；

③ hardly改為hard。hard意為“努力地”，hardly意為“幾乎不”；

④ proud改為pride。take pride in等同于be proud of，意為“以……自豪”。

3. 評(píng)分：

按中考英語(yǔ)作文滿分15分的評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)，本文修改前可得13分。