張明旭
Our great country, China has a long history and rich cultures. Our traditional cultures are like the brightest stars leading us to be great and powerful. Do you know how to cherish our traditional culture? Now let me offer some suggestions about how to cherish our traditional culture.
First, pay attention to learning Chinese. We should listen to Chinese lessons carefully. Also wed better read Chinese classical books, especially the four famous works in our leisure time. Second, learn more history about our country. China has a 5000-year-long history. It contains too many things being worth learning and tasting. Third, remember our traditional festivals. According to a survey, 60% middle school students cant remember our traditional festivals. Whenever the traditional festival comes, show your attention and learn to make it meaningful.
Those are my suggestions about how to cherish our traditional culture. Traditional cultures are our roots, also it is continuous power for our countrys development. Boys and girls lets take action now.
【簡評】首段開門見山地引出寫作話題,比喻句的使用使文章內(nèi)涵豐富。體現(xiàn)了某一定的英文寫作技巧。中間段的寫作中,該名學(xué)生充分利用寫作題目提供的素材進行有條理的說明,簡單句與復(fù)合句相結(jié)合,恰到好處地運用了舉例子,列數(shù)字等說明方法,條理清晰并具有一定的可讀性。尾段在總結(jié)全文的同時,十分自然地升華了本文的主題。從整體的篇章結(jié)構(gòu)和語言運用上來看,該名學(xué)生具備較好的語言基礎(chǔ),準(zhǔn)確地掌握了英語說明文的寫作結(jié)構(gòu)。
指導(dǎo)教師:王永豐