趙雨萱
Should students make friends on line? Some people say yes. Internet helps people make many friends. Chatting on line, students can express more freely, and even get help for their foreign language studies.
Others, however, someone thinks students should not. They say making friends on line is a waste of time. Its not good for study. Besides. Even some students get cheated on line.
It is my opinion that students should place their study, health and safety before other things. As for friendship, we can find it in our classmates and other people around us.
簡(jiǎn)評(píng):這是一個(gè)大家喜歡的話題,也是同學(xué)們爭(zhēng)議的焦點(diǎn)。小作者能夠突破常規(guī),沒(méi)有開(kāi)篇就談自己的觀點(diǎn)。而是在開(kāi)篇的疑問(wèn)句后,分析了正反雙方的觀點(diǎn),作者用some和others就機(jī)智地表達(dá)出來(lái)了,然后再說(shuō)出自己的觀點(diǎn)。表述層次清晰、邏輯合理。諸如besides, in my opinion等詞的亮點(diǎn)呈現(xiàn),使文章渾然天成。
(指導(dǎo)教師: 孫全生)